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Tuesday, 12 March 2019

w7t1 descriptive writing


WALT: Use a range of figurative language to describe a moment in time.
A freezing cold day One day It was way more cold than usual I’d say it's -70°C or so. There was one black bird flying high above It looks like it could nearly touch the clouds, sawing through the sky like a jet and flying like a pilot.

The sea was calm and blue as the sky, But why was it calm I asked myself, maybe it was the calm before the storm. The snow was white as a polar bear.

All of sudden the bird had dunken under calm blue sea, Then she came back with a fish in her mouth and seaweed dangled from the, the bird that I see is black with feathers and fish to feed her baby’s.
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  1. Anonymous13 March 2019 at 09:38

    Hi Jimmy It's me Nika, I like how you used similes in your writing. Maybe next time you could check if your writing makes sense. I like the part when you described about the bird getting fish. Keep up the great work Jimmy.

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    1. Anonymous14 March 2019 at 09:29

      The, the in the text is pronounced like thi with no silent letters or any thing
      -Jimmy

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